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Post by catdemogogery on May 1, 2004 10:54:48 GMT 7
These are about walking through my archery club at the base of Mt Dandenong. Lately it has been my favorite place to be by myself.
arrow flies
in the forrest
a kookburra
in the trees
rain falls through
mountain air
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Post by demi sex god from hell on May 14, 2004 19:59:20 GMT 7
nice. i like it.
so "it looks like wayne's basement, only its not wayne's basement"
is not a haiku?
what exactly defines a haiku?
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Post by catdemogogery on May 15, 2004 15:45:01 GMT 7
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Post by soundslikequiet on May 17, 2004 12:54:05 GMT 7
Does the last line need to be relatively irrelevant (double negative?) to the flow/story of the haiku? If so these fail. Check it out;
Billy Corgan;
Despite all my rage
I have zero fashio sense
I look like an egg
Guy Sebastian;
When my fame runs out
I'll sell my virginity
To pay the month's rent
Ben Cousins;
With a broken leg
I'd still get thirty touches
I am a hero
and finally, Nick Lachey;
I can't believe it
My wife is the dumbest bitch
But she gives great head
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Post by belfczar on May 18, 2004 9:05:19 GMT 7
here's an example of a fine haiku by the poet seanbaby: (or how i learned to stop using my imagination and start quoting other sites)
Tony Danza is tasty
He rubs my ass
And floats into mystery.
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Post by soundslikequiet on May 18, 2004 17:55:55 GMT 7
I thought a haiku had to be 5-7-5?
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Post by belfczar on May 19, 2004 12:58:15 GMT 7
try this then: Tony Danza is tasty, he rubs my ass and floats into mystery pronounce mystery (MISS - TREE). Anyway, i didn't write it.  |
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Friends of P.
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Post by Friends of P. on Jul 17, 2004 1:53:02 GMT 7
Here's a haiku spin on an old sesame street favourite
are you listening
there are chickens in the trees
they are hiding there
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